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SWEET JANE
sitting on her VELVET chair
above the surreal life of a rock star
beneath the dark metallic sky
where life is an old vinyl record
hung up on Lou Reed
who groans with a grimacing tone
sitting with a symposium of ambitions
above the translation of ideas
beneath the cryptic polluted star
where the hissing vinyl scratches
the nonconforming truths of Lou
who pops sentiment with danger
sitting with her blue eyes winking
above the pain of the UNDERGROUND
beneath the apologizing clouds
where warped records skip
and repeat the same line
Sweet Jane
10 comments:
Great words around a classic.
An inventive and sensible post.
WOW. This is amazing! One of the best poems I've read in some time.
I'm troubled to select a favorite line, but this really grabs me: "who pops sentiment with danger" I really, really just love it all! Excellent. I'll definitely be following you.
I enjoyed this ... like that you chose Sweet Jane from the Velvet Underground .. her mother's name.
Wow, I like this creation, so textured and layered.
Excellent...love how you weaved in velvet underground...
Bravo! Sweet Jane is one of my favorite songs of the haunted Mr. Reed. Velvet Underground comes up for air!
I enjoyed reading this aloud...the alliteration and assonance work well; as does the structure. Putting her above and below...central to the piece.
Gets in my top 10 placing! Wonderfully deep.
"Nonconforming truth of Lou"...oh, perfect! One of a kind..
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