tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post5015932109680337383..comments2023-11-03T01:56:45.922-07:00Comments on poga poetry: Wayne Pitchkohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-44184601623235906042010-01-15T18:16:58.905-08:002010-01-15T18:16:58.905-08:00Such a sad story with a very ahppy ending. Beautif...Such a sad story with a very ahppy ending. Beautiful!<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-11249269570609048142010-01-10T08:49:02.870-08:002010-01-10T08:49:02.870-08:00You've captured the essence of the photo perfe...You've captured the essence of the photo perfectly, IMO. Plain, unvarnished words here - a death song and a warning. <br />Great work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-78953714072965148452010-01-05T14:54:44.071-08:002010-01-05T14:54:44.071-08:00Hi Wayne, thanks for your comment at my blog, and ...Hi Wayne, thanks for your comment at my blog, and I'm happy it led me over here to see your site and read this moving response to the RWP prompt; the image evoked something like that for me too. Thanks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-89875222666589311882010-01-04T21:48:18.433-08:002010-01-04T21:48:18.433-08:00This is a very gritty and visceral piece. I like t...This is a very gritty and visceral piece. I like the play of words in the title (and closing line) that echoes the photograph's as well.Francis Scudellarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01008685302028451297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-82736593789766658912010-01-04T10:27:15.574-08:002010-01-04T10:27:15.574-08:00I knew little about addiction until reading this p...I knew little about addiction until reading this piece. It's vivid and vibrant with dark and light. Nice!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-58470665934911627882010-01-04T07:44:33.213-08:002010-01-04T07:44:33.213-08:00I enjoyed the imagery you conveyed here. It is a n...I enjoyed the imagery you conveyed here. It is a nice piece of work.<br />-RobertaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-38849730028513882712010-01-03T07:17:19.082-08:002010-01-03T07:17:19.082-08:00So very powerful with many amazing images..you did...So very powerful with many amazing images..you did a really fine job with this one, Wayne!Cynthia Shorthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-31511515928182248632010-01-03T04:28:55.495-08:002010-01-03T04:28:55.495-08:00Nice oneNice oneJeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-57723892643999396242010-01-02T17:27:12.498-08:002010-01-02T17:27:12.498-08:00You've conveyed the depressing reality of the ...You've conveyed the depressing reality of the smack freak's life very well.The ending was very moving and beautiful.rallentandahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06980559347805844568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-42944415059922449462010-01-02T15:36:01.150-08:002010-01-02T15:36:01.150-08:00Wow! I am amazed at the varying places this pictur...Wow! I am amazed at the varying places this picture took us! You have created a whole world here, one that makes perfect sense with the photo. The details and the mixing of shadow and light, along with the earthy and elevated diction make this come to life. Beautifully done!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-9832437838624667162010-01-02T15:30:01.887-08:002010-01-02T15:30:01.887-08:00Wayne - Thanks. The darker pictures are of the rig...Wayne - Thanks. The darker pictures are of the right side view and the sunny ones are of the left - both of my back yard. It easy to add them. Just go to "layout" and click on "add a gadget". That will open a window where you pick the gadget to add. Choose "add a picture". It will then instruct you to either browse on your own computer or get a picture from the Internet. You can move the pictures around on your blog with the layout view and preview them. If I can do it, anybody can.<br /><br />Now, I'm going back up to read your poem! :-)Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-14724322175229478492010-01-02T15:06:53.162-08:002010-01-02T15:06:53.162-08:00You've encapsulated the life in raw reality. E...You've encapsulated the life in raw reality. Excellent.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-66405752220090772702010-01-02T11:36:00.246-08:002010-01-02T11:36:00.246-08:00Your repetitions of the word light (with glow, cla...Your repetitions of the word light (with glow, clarity, emerging, awakened, phoenix) really kick this into overdrive. A very bright poem of its circumstance.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-38491292810786672112010-01-02T11:06:22.501-08:002010-01-02T11:06:22.501-08:00shooting junk
in the empty church loft
above the b...<i>shooting junk<br />in the empty church loft<br />above the back alley of filth</i><br /><br />This is a very strong image, Wayne. But it <i>first</i> grabbed me because of the way it accidentally triggered an unrelated memory, not of a drug situation, but from the final year of the Communist dictatorship in Romania. Too involved to explain here. Only saying that I sometimes forget how much the extraneous, unrelated stuff we bring to our reading of a work affects how we react, what grabs us quickly and what sinks in more slowly.<br /><br />You portray the junkie world in powerful images. It is beautifully written, but I like the movement toward the light, not simply a cold death ODing in the church loft but the appearance of the self-ghost that leads him to the light, that makes this something else. A recognition of a kind of worth and dignity in the least likely of places. <br /><br />Your lines,<br /><br /><i>when the ghost of himself appeared<br />on a tightrope of broken eggshells<br />and led him to the light</i><br /><br />reminds me of the Hellenistic concept of one's guardian angel being a part of oneself, an unsullied portion that appears the same as the sullied portion but with a radiance about it. It is just right that the junkie's "angel" is an image of the junkie.<br /><br />Thanks for this poem, Wayne.Paul Oakleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17426789386840488470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-20366116263477462832010-01-01T17:44:42.487-08:002010-01-01T17:44:42.487-08:00Wonderfully bleak. Here are my favorite lines:
w...Wonderfully bleak. Here are my favorite lines:<br /><br />when the ghost of himself appeared<br /><br /><br /><br />on a tightrope of broken eggshellsErin Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03428693832930474044noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7693965280291750521.post-57921508354014405142010-01-01T17:34:28.135-08:002010-01-01T17:34:28.135-08:00This is a sad story Wayne but an accurate glimpse ...This is a sad story Wayne but an accurate glimpse into the world of an addict. I think the confusion of shadows and light is telling. Thank you for sharing this and I hope the coming year brings lots of love and joy to your part of the world.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.com